The number of words used means less than nothing at this point, but it is pretty bland. Though I still wouldn't lobby for a heccin' rewrite because that's not going to appreciably change the thing in any real way this early on.
My nigga it sucks to read. It's a draft. It should be dynamic and engaging. It needs a hook.
Nah, it's being posted for free on green reddit. There's no reason for him to care about "hooking" you unless he wants your shekels which you aren't going to give him anyway. It can be as shit as he wants it to be if he's just sharting it out into the aether here anyway.
You don't write anything good until you've written at least 100,000+ words of abject dogshit, the will to try and fail is as important as the will to succeed.
Nigger, he's written less than a tenth of one chapter. I don't even edit anything until I've written an entire book.
uh oh stinkyZh-ero: The more I think about it, the opening of the poster is pretty bad. I know what point I'm trying to make, but I guess I'm still not skilled enough to put it into words properly. Maybe a picture would work better instead.
Zh-ero: Thank you so much for caring about what is written. The point of me posting this story here is to improve my writing skills and experiment with different ways a story can be told. Money isn't what I'm after here—improvement is. Also, I think Kiwi Farms can be more than just a place where people discuss Lolcows; it can be a place where people do many different things.
A line can't be fickle.
Zh-ero: I thought I was being clever when I came up with that one D:. But you're right about reading more books; I'm definitely lacking in that area. Thanks for the advice.