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🇵🇦 Nuestro primer dominio localizado está en español en kiwifarms.pa. Our first localized domain is on Spanish on kiwifarms.pa.
Connor Bible
You need a beta.
Also, don't start a story with a character waking up and an exposition dump. It's literary suicide!
But hey, at least you wrote...
Connor Bible
Why do I feel like I've heard "Janus City" before, though. . .?
Okay, make your tenses agree, first.
why would he gently shake a man's head. ...
Connor Bible
Story is pretty alright, spotted a few weird things with it though.
Does that mean his skin is tan with random white spots on his body?
It...