Respuestas al mensaje #10,419

That just. . .I know it's supposed to be self-depreciating, but it just makes me sad. It IS well-written, though!

Why are we learning this in boring-ass third person narrative summary? Show us the stakes through Connor's eyes. Put us in his shoes. Make us...

There's effective ways of setting up a scene and a character and then there's this. What you have here is a bare bones framework about how...

*sigh* Apologies to @Ruin & @Segue . You guys called it, & I went "nooo, that won't happen, I believe in Connor" like I haven't been reading the...